From the very beginning of this essay I knew that it was not going to be your typical boring eight page paper. Mrs. Williams grabs the attention of her audience using descriptive adjective that allow you to really see everything that she is describing to you. She goes on to explain the "lay of the land," which in this case is a bowling alley, and all of the people occupying it. Mrs. Williams goes as far as to tell what the employees are wearing down to the a mount of makeup that they have applied that evening. The fact that she discusses the ages and behaviors of the men bowling in the Monday night leagues allowed me to visualize the players as if I was presently in the bowling alley. Through making hypotesis's about the men, the leagues, and the bowling alley in general, Mrs. Williams invites her readers to request more as they wonder what else she will learn on her upcoming visits.
I agree with what you said about how Ms. Williams went into deep detail and described fluently what the gentlemen where wearing and how they reacted to their games, and to each other. I liked how she was able to come to the conclusion that the man with the Triple H t-shirt would be leaving shortly to go watch Monday Night Wrestling. It just goes to show that there is so much we, as students, can focus on in our own research. She made 8 pages seem easy and i feel as if she could even write more. 5 pages for us should be easy if we use this essay as a basis to our own.
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